In the dead of one rainy night
He crept into my room uninvited
Pinning me down to the bed very tight
He began to do what his body wanted.
This has become a regular ritual
That I’ve come to endure every night
The act has never been consensual
Utterly bruised, I’ve lost the will to fight
One night I wanted to run away and shout
But he threatened to kill me if I dare
Or have me immediately thrown out
Unless I yielded to him with my body bare.
He forced his hard-self deep inside of me
Just as he….
Read the complete poem on my Living Poems Blog
See also the successor poem: In the dead of the night, again
©Copyright 2018 | Victor Uyanwanne
Victors Corner Blog 
Hi Victor, I read the poem and the comments so I know this poem you authored was not from a personal experience, which I am glad to hear. You indicated you wanted to draw attention to the abuse that some children are exposed to. It’s hard to even comprehend but I know it happens and I can’t imagine what that does to someone and the healing that needs to take place. There is one line in your poem that I found particularly bothersome. To be honest with you, I can’t imagine Jesus or any of the Apostles utilizing that method of verbal linkage, surely there is another way. No intent to offend, just asking for your consideration in the future. Grace and blessings.
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Yes, your observation is correct; the poem wasn’t from a personal experience… You stated there is a line in it you “found particularly bothersome.” May I ask which one is it? And any suggestions on “another way” to put it?
Oh by the way Bruce, I am not offended by the feedback. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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I was kind of hoping you be able to know which one but it reads as follows; “He forced his hard-self deep inside of me” A possible replacement … I’m not a poet but another line that doesn’t present such a graphic picture yet conveys the violation. Hope that helps. Blessings!
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In a way Bruce, I suspected that could be the line you were referring to. But I didn’t want to assume, hence I asked for clarifications.
You know, as a poet it’s not every time one uses euphemism to pass a message across. Some times, one has to say it as it is. You can say that was what happened here.
Perhaps, if I had considered the line “too graphic”, I might have had a second thought about using it ( or even possibly put a warning “Graphic Content”). However, be assured that your feedback is appreciated.
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I’m not always right Victor, thank you for your consideration, sincerely appreciated. Have a blessed Sunday!
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Thanks Bruce. But don’t be so harsh on yourself please. You know I’m learning too myself. Happy Sunday to you as well.
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